worst writing in the Palo Alto Daily News today
Worst piece of writing in today’s Palo Alto Daily News, from the front page:
In the months since Caltrain launched the popular express trains a year and a half ago, it report nearly a 20 percent increase in ridership as commuters embraced the new, faster trains.
October 24th, 2005 at 8:53 pm
Wow. That *is* terrible.
October 28th, 2005 at 11:56 am
Ouch, man. I wrote that.
October 28th, 2005 at 5:15 pm
I’m sorry, but it’s a really cumbersome sentence. I’d recommend “In the year and a half since Caltrain launched the popular service, it reported…” as a less awkward version. The time-since-event really only needs to be mentioned once in a sentence.