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10/24/2005

worst writing in the Palo Alto Daily News today

Filed under: — adrian @ 6:29 pm

Worst piece of writing in today’s Palo Alto Daily News, from the front page:

In the months since Caltrain launched the popular express trains a year and a half ago, it report nearly a 20 percent increase in ridership as commuters embraced the new, faster trains.

3 Responses to “worst writing in the Palo Alto Daily News today”

  1. Sherv Says:

    Wow. That *is* terrible.

  2. Luke Says:

    Ouch, man. I wrote that.

  3. Adrian Says:

    I’m sorry, but it’s a really cumbersome sentence. I’d recommend “In the year and a half since Caltrain launched the popular service, it reported…” as a less awkward version. The time-since-event really only needs to be mentioned once in a sentence.

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